Comments on: i wrote this and im going to enter it in my schools lit mag what do u think? http://bottleantiques.com/bottle-mania/i-wrote-this-and-im-going-to-enter-it-in-my-schools-lit-mag-what-do-u-think/ An antique and bottle collector's webblog! Sun, 22 Aug 2010 05:58:09 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.1 By: Michael B http://bottleantiques.com/bottle-mania/i-wrote-this-and-im-going-to-enter-it-in-my-schools-lit-mag-what-do-u-think/comment-page-1/#comment-3223 Michael B Wed, 01 Apr 2009 23:45:14 +0000 http://bottleantiques.com/bottle-mania/i-wrote-this-and-im-going-to-enter-it-in-my-schools-lit-mag-what-do-u-think/#comment-3223 There are some areas where some re-writing would be good but overall I was wondering what was the point. OK - blackouts. You then stab the old woman. I've no idea why. Large hands - were they from the bald man? I assume you've been hospitalised (mental condition) in the last bit but that's not clear. overall it lacks structure and a sense of purpose and conclusion. There are some areas where some re-writing would be good but overall I was wondering what was the point. OK – blackouts. You then stab the old woman. I’ve no idea why. Large hands – were they from the bald man?

I assume you’ve been hospitalised (mental condition) in the last bit but that’s not clear.

overall it lacks structure and a sense of purpose and conclusion.

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